zopyrus: roman woman with pearls (roman lady)
zopyrus ([personal profile] zopyrus) wrote in [community profile] fiction_drabbles 2009-05-20 12:50 pm (UTC)

I really like this--you really capture your character's disorientation, and your turn from the dreamy first paragraph into the urgency of the second half is nicely timed. Also, I'm a sucker for alliteration, which you use well.
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