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hold to the truth in your heart ([personal profile] lovepeaceohana) wrote in [community profile] fiction_drabbles 2010-05-07 06:26 pm (UTC)

Title: city lights

I enjoyed this, although admittedly I felt a little lost. Lines like that he could afford to parent her disease, that he wanted her and not the state's bribe and bounty feel powerful, and make me want to learn more about these characters and their situation.

Title: Impromptu

This is a tough one for me because of the age difference thing. I appreciate that it was written from the young woman's point of view, though, because part of my problem with stories like these (dub?-con by way of statutory) is the typical lack of agency manifested by these women. You've done a good job of putting this particular reader at ease simply by demonstrating that this is her choice, and indicating that it isn't uninformed.

Title: ink & ashes

My favourite of the three; it feels very poignant and - heavy? expectant? - there's something about it that suggests a tipping point, a breakthrough. It's very evocative. I like it :3

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