sterling: (Turks Thumbs Up)
Sterling ([personal profile] sterling) wrote in [community profile] fiction_drabbles 2010-07-21 08:12 am (UTC)

Thank you for your feedback! ^_^

I'm glad you caught the unspecified gender with the narrator. I specifically crafted it that way, so that the reader could interpret it the way they wanted to, rather than have me place a specific ideal there.

It could be, that the first person narrative feels like speaking when you read it. Sometimes that happens to me, too. I was playing around with pacing a bit, trying not to deluge the reader with talking as much, even though this scene is largely a dialog. Not sure I succeeded there... XD

I'm glad you liked it. Your comment brought a smile to my face. ^_^

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