Prompt 19: Kiss

[girlyesterday]

Title: Going Against Instinct
Challenge/Prompt: #19. Kiss
Original Fiction:
Characters/Pairings: Logan, Ally
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Disclaimer: My original fiction piece


It's indulgent, impulsive and entirely wrong.

She should be disgusted her lips are locked onto Logan, drinking in the taste of coffee and lime cheesecake. She had hated him for years and here she was, playing tongue wrestle with him; goodbye inhibitions, hello recklessness.

This close, she could see the faded freckles on the bridge of his nose. She'd never noticed how long his lashes were, sweeping out in an arc when he closed his eyes.

"Quit staring." his words vibrated inside her mouth, their teeth clinked together, like two glasses of wine. Cheers.

It was so wrong, it felt right.

Comments

[senmut]

The part that gets me most is the teeth clinking. That touch of realism, because no one ever writes it, and yet it happens, even in long familiar couples, every now and then.

Well-written.

[girlyesterday]

I think people never write it in because it's the sort of thing that can ruin a romantic moment, plus it can be incredibly awkward.

Thank you.

[gussy]

Totally lovely little snapshot. It's really transporting.
Loved the voice. goodbye inhibitions, hello recklessness.

Also, how cool is the combination of lime cheesecake and coffee! YUM.

[girlyesterday]

Thanks for the feedback. It was interesting because I was at least five words over and had to scramble around to cut it back to 100.

Truthfully, I've never had that combination of coffee and lime cheesecake but I am going to try it out. It sounds yummy.