Leave the Key

[sinsyne]

Title: Leave the Key
Challenge/Prompt: Symbol
Original Fiction or Fanfiction: Original Fiction
Characters: Cynthia, Jonathan
Rating: G
Warnings: None.
Disclaimer: All mine.
Summary: Her family hadn't been hateful, simply distant and devoid of love.
Author's Notes: Having written nothing but lengthy essays and epic hero stories for the past few weeks, 100 words was a bit of a shock.

“That’s the last one,” she muttered, depositing the heavy, cardboard box in the hallway.

With some degree of longing, she surveyed her room, barren, save for the furniture –bed, desk, bookshelves- of her childhood.

It was furniture she intended to leave behind, with everything personal already neatly packed in boxes and luggage bags. She wanted a bright future and happy memories, something this house could never provide. Her family hadn't been hateful, simply distant and devoid of love.

“Cyn! You ready?” Jonathan hollered from downstairs.

“Coming!”

Smiling wistfully, she exited the room, leaving her house key on the white dresser.

Comments

[meoryn]

I really like this. That finality and fresh hope with the key on the dresser - a new beginning. Great use of the prompt.

100 words is a tough nut to crack. I always struggle to keep it to that wordcount but it's definately a great challenge isn't it?

[iamfiction]

I know Cynthia seems ready for new, happy memories elsewhere, but knowing that she couldn't have those kind of memories to take with her, from the house she grew up in, makes me a little sad.

Wondeful job.

[sterling]

There's something to be said about capturing the moment one steps into adulthood and starts making one's own choices. Symbolically, leaving home (a good or bad one) is one of those steps. Nice job!