Intriguing! You certainly ground us in time and location with the details of her experience. Referring to the car as 'just like everyone else's' and that she knows there are many other's just like it is a clever way to hint that she doesn't anticpiate being found quickly, if at all. The last line is a good bridge to lead into why she was late yesterday if this had been a longer piece, and yet, in this, it leaves me wondering why she was late. Nice one! : )
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Date: 2009-05-22 09:00 am (UTC)